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Keyklee
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Age : 34
Location : Germany
Points : 5646
Registration date : 2008-11-16
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AngelofLove
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Number of posts : 12
Age : 29
Location : The crook of Erik's neck...sigh
Points : 5679
Registration date : 2008-10-09
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| Wow....i'm actually speechless...it was such a wonderful chapter, I loved it. MORE MORE MORE!!! you've let me have a nibble now I want the whole damn feast! | |
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Gabby81
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Number of posts : 398
Age : 43
Location : Canada
Points : 5770
Registration date : 2008-08-30
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| Wow....this is a great first chapter! I look forward to reading more! | |
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Slytherliggie
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Number of posts : 143
Age : 34
Location : South Africa
Points : 5889
Registration date : 2008-05-21
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| Very good first chapter! I would like o know what happens now. Please, please, please continue again soon? | |
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Ange de Musique
Newbie
Number of posts : 71
Age : 33
Location : Oklahoma
Points : 5818
Registration date : 2008-05-23
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| Keyklee, This is one of the best Phantom phanfics I have ever read, and believe me, I've read quite a few! This story has an incredible emotional core, and you pull off first person descriptions brilliantly. One little thing I noticed: "And in case it of night, where should I go?" Something is confuddled in that part, or I'm just not reading it right.  This sentence is superb:"Then I gathered them in my arms and cuddled them to my chest for several moments." That really grabbed me, the wording and everything is excellent! Amazing beginning! I look forward to reading more from you.  Laura | |
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Keyklee
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Number of posts : 6
Age : 34
Location : Germany
Points : 5646
Registration date : 2008-11-16
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PhantomnessFay
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Number of posts : 2388
Age : 49
Location : England
Points : 6547
Registration date : 2008-05-19
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| Since chapters two and three are merged, justify the reason for the other woman and what you can't finish, give to me and I will fix. Just let me know what you have in mind.
Your obedient servant,
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Gabby81
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Number of posts : 398
Age : 43
Location : Canada
Points : 5770
Registration date : 2008-08-30
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| Keyklee....you are being very hard on yourselves. This is a wonderful forum with absolutely wonderful members. I know what it's like to be less than satisfied with a piece of writing, and it can be very frustrating. I know you will get it to where you want it to be, and we will all be waiting to read it. Fay is one of the most wonderful people I've ever known and an incredible writer. She really will give you whatever help you need. I look forward to your next chapters, whenever you are ready to give them  | |
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Heart_Rose
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Number of posts : 17
Age : 34
Location : illinois
Points : 5795
Registration date : 2008-06-15
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| very nice, ma ami. but where is the rest? | |
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