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PostSubject: I WON!!!!!   Mon Jun 23, 2008 4:38 pm

just for fun, I entered a Phantom story I had written in the school's writing contest, and I won!!!!! would you guys like me to post it?
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PostSubject: Re: I WON!!!!!   Mon Jun 23, 2008 5:36 pm

Sure, I need something to read. Very Happy

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PostSubject: Re: I WON!!!!!   Mon Jun 23, 2008 6:10 pm

yeah, post: i want to read too Wink
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PostSubject: Re: I WON!!!!!   Mon Jun 23, 2008 7:19 pm

Yes yes post post! congrats btw

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PostSubject: Re: I WON!!!!!   Tue Jun 24, 2008 10:57 am

post it now im all excited... must read it

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PostSubject: Re: I WON!!!!!   Tue Jun 24, 2008 1:51 pm

me too!!!

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PostSubject: Re: I WON!!!!!   Tue Jun 24, 2008 4:54 pm

The Phantom of the Opera: track down those fries!(it's not Christine they're after...

Angel of Music/ The Mirrior: the mirrior is open. The Phantom has hypnotized Christine. she walks towards the mirrior, holding a bag of Mcdonald's fries. The Phantom spots the fries and looses all intrest in Christine. He takes the fries, shuts the mirrior, and leaves. Christine is in a trance for a moment.
Christine: Angel? hey! my fries are gone!

The Phantom of the opera: The Phantom takes the bag of fries to his lair.

The Music of the Night: The Phantom sings lovingly to the fries before devouring them
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PostSubject: Re: I WON!!!!!   Tue Jun 24, 2008 5:08 pm

All I ask of You: Raoul is singing to the fries instead of Christine. she tries to get his attention, but to him she is invisible, so she leaves
Christine: Raoul, I'm over here! hello! Raoul! fine, I can't take this! I'm leaving!

Masquerade: everyone sings about how good the fries are.

Wandering Child/Bravo,monsuire: Christine has gone to her father's grave w/ a bag of fries. she suddenly hears the Phantom's voice.
Phantom: wandering child, so lost, so helpless, please give me your fries!
Christine: angel or...exuse me?
Phantom: that's right! you heard me! hand them over, or I'll shoot fireballs at you from this staff!
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PostSubject: Re: I WON!!!!!   Tue Jun 24, 2008 5:20 pm

Christine:but I thought you loved me!
Phantom: turns out I love fries more! now give me the bag!
Raoul runs up
Raoul: Christine! no, wait! don't give him those fries! give them to me!
Christine: you're choosing a bag of fries over me too?! this is rediculous! no one loves me anymore!
she throws down the bag and runs off. both men stare at the fries.
Phantom: go ahead and try it, boy! I've got fireballs...

Down once More/Track down this murdeder: The Phantom has a bag of fries. he takes them to his lair. Raoul fallows, wanting the fries. Christine fallows, wanting one of the men to love her. The Phantom ties up Raoul. neither notices Christine.
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PostSubject: Re: I WON!!!!!   Tue Jun 24, 2008 5:31 pm

Phantom: order your fine horses now! raise up your hand to the level of your eyes! nothing can save you know exept perhaps the fries!
he puts them on the table.
Phantom: say the fries are mine and you go free! say they're yours and you die!
Raoul: my fries!
Phantom: did you not hear a word I said?!
the 2 of them continue to fight over the fries while Christine says the fallowing
Christine: why do you 2 love fries over me? sure, they taste good, but they make yoy fat, and then your cholesterol goes up! I don't make you fat! come on! can they comfort you? can you converse with them? can they say 'I love you'? what about my needs? I need love too! I'll marry you, Raoul, that's how desperate I am! no, I'll marry both of you! come on fellas what do you say? forget the fries?
Neither has heard her. she spots the fries on the table.
Christine: heck I'll end this right now! I'm taking the fries boys!
Christine grabes the fries and sneaks out of the lair. a moment passes before the men realize what happened. The Phantom walks over to the table
Phantom: I'll just write 'property of '...oh my god, the fries are gone!
Raoul: oh no!
Phantom: I bet Christine took them!
Raoul: who?
Phantom: Christine! the girl we were both madly inlove with before we discovered McDonald's fries!
Raoul: oh yeah! let's go get her!
Phantom: yeah!
soon, The Phantom and Raoul are chasing Christine all over the opera house
Phantom: give them to me!
Raoul: no, me!
Phantom: I'll give you a dollar!
Raoul:I'll give you a kiss!
Phantom: I'll give you a dollar and a kiss!
as the biding and chasing continues, Christine says to herself...
Christine: now they want me.

the end! what did y'all think?


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PostSubject: Re: I WON!!!!!   Tue Jun 24, 2008 5:35 pm

That was cute Smile

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PostSubject: Re: I WON!!!!!   Tue Jun 24, 2008 6:03 pm

thanks.
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PostSubject: Re: I WON!!!!!   Tue Jun 24, 2008 7:00 pm

Very cute! Was this a play? It's not written like a story. Were you having a difficult time posting it in one post. I noticed you had to do several posts.

Good job! Razz Razz Razz
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PostSubject: Re: I WON!!!!!   Wed Jun 25, 2008 9:24 am

yeah, it was a play, based on listining to "Down once more" while eating Mcdonald's fries in the car! and yes, it was difficult putting it all in one post. glad you liked it!
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PostSubject: Re: I WON!!!!!   Wed Jun 25, 2008 9:54 am

Now I'm really hungry Sad

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PostSubject: Re: I WON!!!!!   Wed Jun 25, 2008 10:12 am

Well done! Keep writing!

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PostSubject: Re: I WON!!!!!   Thu Jun 26, 2008 7:18 am

I'm laughing so much I'm about ot cry. Laughing Crying or Very sad
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PostSubject: Re: I WON!!!!!   Thu Jun 26, 2008 11:28 am

lol! hmm... why did i get this sudden urge to go to macdonalds?
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PostSubject: Re: I WON!!!!!   Thu Jun 26, 2008 3:37 pm

So you can eat their French fries and get an inspiration to write a Phan phic. Smile Smile Smile
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PostSubject: Re: I WON!!!!!   Thu Jun 26, 2008 4:26 pm

yah.. i can totally see it, the phantom of mcdonalds
and he hides deep in the bottom of the milkshake machine
lol! and his don juan burger Laughing
it`s working already!
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PostSubject: Re: I WON!!!!!   Thu Jun 26, 2008 4:48 pm

I want a Don Juan Burger No

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PostSubject: Re: I WON!!!!!   Thu Jun 26, 2008 5:22 pm

yeah, me too Neutral
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PostSubject: Re: I WON!!!!!   Thu Jun 26, 2008 6:19 pm

I bet it would be really awesome.....

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PostSubject: Re: I WON!!!!!   Thu Jun 26, 2008 6:23 pm

we should invent it
(with a little help from erik the burgermaker) lol!
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PostSubject: Re: I WON!!!!!   Thu Jun 26, 2008 6:26 pm

and then it can have 'I am Don Juan Triumphant' written in sesame seeds!

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